What happened?
One afternoon in the middle of winter Brayan decides to go into the woods with his friends because the day before they had heard loud noises coming from there.
They walk for an hour and find nothing, later they find an abandoned house in the middle of nowhere, surrounded by tall and majestic trees, with a dark feeling, that freezes the nerves.
They were undecided whether to go in, ten minutes later, under the freezing cold they decide to go in. The boys did not know what awaited them, a little later they arrive in a room that at first glance seems macabre, with stairs that lead underground and a noise of faint screams as if hell was coming out from there. With a shred of hope that nothing bad would happen, all five of them went down. The walls seemed to become more and more red, the more they went down the more oxygen was lacking, all five felt increasingly hot, they could not believe it, they were in a sky alley, the road behind them was crumbling, a dead end.
what will the protagonists do?
- reorganization of the event (0%)
- advance the investigations (100%)
- delve deeper into their origins (0%)

10/05/2025 at 10:04
Hello darlyn and welcome to this platform. 🙂
Challenge of the game is to try and write a complete story in 10 chapters with 50000 characters.
The story you’re writing is intriguing but lack a bit of description.
You can improve your writing trying to give a more in depth description of your characters. Remember that you have the story on your head, so you see the characters. We don’t, we can only see what you allow us to.
So who is Bryan? who is Marco? Why I need to simpatize for this guys ? Where is this place they went to? 🙂
You can use the 5000 characters the platform offers you to really get us hooked to every step your characters take.
Then this is my personal opinion, then is up to you how you want to write the story 😉
Hope my suggestions would help you improve 🙂
For the moment I follow the story and I vote to know what are the places marked on the map 🙂
Later 😉
19/03/2025 at 05:09
an interesting incipit … maybe I would have used all the 5000 available characters!
Good job ! I follow this story !!